Improvements

After looking at my narrative I realised that it is too much like a list of events which makes the story very predictable.

Improvements:

- Start off as the rhino is being poached, so the audience thinks the rhino is going to be killed. BUT rangers/WWF staff are actually saving the rhino.

Also another interesting feature could be to have the sound from rhino's perspective but not whats going on visually. 

Further research:

WWF successfully transported its 7^th black rhino population, using seemingly unconventional means.

Airlifting rhino by its ankles, to save the critically endangered species.

The immense trip transported 19 of the animals 1500km across South Africa to a secret new location.

Continuation improving narrative:

Starting from pervious shot 6.

7. Black screen, non-diegetic sounds of what seems to be sawing off horn.. mumbled talking, people rushing about

8. Tracking shot and zooming out of rhino being transported by helicopter in order to save the species from poachers. 

9. Message on screen.